READER: ZIYU ZHANG DATE: APRIL 3, 2009
TITLE: SUPERMAN LIVES GENRE: action/science fiction
AUTHOR: Kevin Smith LOCATION: Metropolis
LOG LINE: The infamous
Brainiac who comes to earth on a spaceship in search of a technology called “the Eradicator” to help rebuild his body. Following superman death, the “Eradicator” (a robot) comes to life, grabs Superman’s body, and revives him.
EXCELLENT GOOD FAIR POOR
PREMISE X
CHARACTERIZATION X
STORYLINE X
DIALOGUE X
SYNOPSIS:The infamous
Brainiac who comes to earth on a spaceship and he is with a malformed head. A small ROBOT works beside him and implanting a cable into the back of the malformed head. The other part of his “body” is in the same situation. After he comes to earth he is in search of a technology called “the Eradicator” and he wants to use this to help rebuild his body. He sees Superman fly around and thought he has the “Eradicator.” So he teams up with Lex Luthor, owner and C.E.O. of Lex Corp, blocks the power of the sun to weaken Superman and kill him and thus, steals his “Eradicator.” When the Man of Steel confronts Brainiac for the first time, he presents
Doomsday, which kills Superman in the streets of Metropolis. As they mourn Superman’s death, Doomsday wakes, and then a great red laser from Brainiac’s ship blows him up. Superman actually had “Eradicator” inside his Fortress of Solitude which he never knew. Following his death, the “Eradicator” (a robot) comes to life, grabs Superman’s body, and revives him. While only half-recovered, Superman leaves to confront Brainiac, who in a desperate act of self-preservation, forces his consciousness to take over a “Thangarian Snare Beast” that “resembles something of a cross between a squid and a spider, but very bio-mechanical and sleek.” Finally, superman succeed and charge Luthor of espionage against the world government such as utilized Brainiac for his own selfish gain, and had further designs on governmental extortion. And at the time superman against with Brainiac and Luthor, the love between him and Lois are still keeping calefactive.
EVALUATION:
The point of plot
Kevin Smith is a big comic follower, the story and the characters set in superman lives is followed in the original comic, for the fans of the comic, they will be happy to see this, but for the other audience maybe it is too boring.
Superman lives focused on the use of the compact structure of the drama: the beginning of drama has been faced with very considerable conflict, the emergence of infamous Brainiac, the defects limb, Lex’s message, the dialogue between host, Lex and Lois in the television studio, the beginning and development of the plot has been step by step explanation when the plot boost to the climax.
The point of market
Superman lives typical propaganda of the American idea of personal heroism, which is inseparable from their culture. A lot of Heroism of the United States movies is the same circumstances, same idea, so the concept of superman lives is marketable. The target audience could be everybody and every career, from young people to old people all of them will be the audience. But such as this kind of film, the theme is same, so the selling point is characters and screen.
The point of characters
Each lines and actions are the language of the characters; they are express the idea and showing the character of the person in literature. This script based on the identity and character, select the language and action which is fit for their personality and psychological expression. Superman: justice, humorous, witty, gentle. Brainiac and Lex: cunning treacherous, arrogant. But need to say that the dialogue was the weakest element, some of the dialogues are ridiculous and unsuitable.
Superman's largest “deficiency" is too strong for this role, it is difficult to design a formidable challenge, it is difficult to mobilize the sentiments of the audience. And the so-called "super hero" movies, the most important role are villain. It is a pity that the weakest point is the villain in this script, the audience did not have enough opportunity to understand the role, it is also he did not have story and lack strength, he can not compare with Joker in "Batman", and not as green magic and Dr. Octopus in series of "Spider-Man". So if the Villain is too weak, it won’t show the power of Superman.
The point of screen
To create such films, special effects lens will not be less, but will be lack of freshness. In fact, the most important effect is shocking lens, the number of the special effects no one cares about it, and it is clear from the script, the shock lens hardly any. But for the short scenes are good, small details add reality, the subject matter has been thoroughly researched. But this script is too short, only 97 pages, it can not be a shooting script, it is just tell the story, not show the story.
Final opinion
If this script will be made into film, for the premise will be fine, superman is famous all over the world, it have a global market, films are about money, superman film will be support by the comic fans and the audience who like series of superman films. And for the plot is good too, it has a strong emotion, and the love between superman and Lois will advance the plot. But for the dialogue it really need improve, otherwise it could not make the characters have a strong personality and could not attract attention from audience. Basically, this script is a good project, the only problem is that, adapt from comic, it does not have novel element, less shock lends and awful dialogue, all of this become one question, how to get audiences attention?